Monday, March 10, 2014

Gutted

 
your strings are pulled
and like the puppet that you are
you dance a dance
of action and reaction
to barbed words
 
baited and hooked
dangling from an arbitrary line
the knife twists and gutted
you're left cut open
 

24 comments:

  1. Two very solid comparisons here really bring out the theme of your poem. The picture which accompanies the piece is brilliantly well-suited.

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    1. Thanks Kerry, I typically write a piece and then try to crate an image that works with it.

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  2. Wow....a stunning metaphoric write.

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  3. so you have worked in the corporate world as well...ha
    or a relationship...or...ha....
    love the dangling from an arbitrary line....

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  4. The action and reaction to barbed words really speaks to me. Wonderful poem!

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  5. Wow! Sometimes I feel tangled in such strings

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  6. I like the staccato rhythm of the verses which enhance the "barbed" nature of the metaphors. Brilliant!

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    1. Thanks Brenda, love how you picked up on that.

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  7. oh my...that is extremely painful...and think each of us has felt a bit like that at one or the other time in our lives... ouch..

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  8. Swim, little fishy. Swim to friendlier waters!

    PS--I was delighted to find your friend request in my mailbox at Goodreads!

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  9. Very good depiction in words and paint of what it must feel like to be at the other end of the famous 'tight line'.

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  10. wow, articulated like surgery!

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  11. It is pretty much slicing through the person without mercy. There are some hard hearted beings who can do it. Great observation Kathryn!

    Hank

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  12. Oh, my goodness. This is so real to me. Well done!

    And I have been there.

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  13. Human interaction is not always good...you don't get this with pets geraniums or sprinklers.
    Liked this poem.

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    1. I like the way your mind works . . . so true.

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  14. Just a wonderful write--someone else used the word staccato above--the words do feel very percusive here--

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  15. awesome pairing this poem with this image.

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  16. The title says it all--made me think of life in America--as we dangle from the corporate strings.

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