cry me a raven of ink and feathers... what an opening... love the image and the emotions that are wrapped in it... in italy i visited a paul flora exhibition - he was masterful with drawing ravens with ink and feather...
Everyone is already commenting on what I really enjoyed most. "Cry me a rave" is creatively original...especially when combined with 'carrion upon your breath.' I like what you did with the prompt.
The memory of 'cry me a river' I think gives us the emotions at the beginning, increasing the effect of the short spark of camera, flash, a blink of eye....you really caught the moment, Kathryn, with camera and the words! :)xx
cry me a raven of ink and feathers... what an opening... love the image and the emotions that are wrapped in it... in italy i visited a paul flora exhibition - he was masterful with drawing ravens with ink and feather...
ReplyDeletecarrion breath...well only if i dont brush regularly...smiles...
ReplyDeletecry me a raven is such a cool turn of phrase....
def set the tone in your verse...
what is cras?
Thanks Brian, cras with one s is latin and means tomorrow, if with 'ss' as in crass it can mean insensitive, thoughtless or tactless.
Deletefinally - someone is crying something other than a river... hahah. Cry me a raven of ink and feathers is def a great opener.
ReplyDeleteHe, he, he, I hear you, thanks :)
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DeleteAmazing images you capture in those brief words.. exceptional
ReplyDeleteWow, thanks Bjorn. :)
DeleteThis is so perfect for the image--such a sense of mystery about it. And perfect for the incredible image.
ReplyDeleteThanks Victoria . . . I was going to try and go with dragons but just couldn't seem to get them to work for me.
DeleteI love your double meaning in "carrion." I'm crazy for word play.
ReplyDeleteCry me a raven...love that. Fantastic piece!
ReplyDeleteThanks Susie . . . that line had been sitting there for a while waiting for a poem to form around it.
DeleteEveryone is already commenting on what I really enjoyed most. "Cry me a rave" is creatively original...especially when combined with 'carrion upon your breath.' I like what you did with the prompt.
ReplyDeleteThanks Mary . . . I had hoped to create a piece of prose but poetry is where I found myself.
DeleteI too like the title and images! Sorry I cannot be more original in my comment. I must say that I am impressed at your unique take.
ReplyDeleteThanks Gabriella, I really appreciate it.
DeleteNice. There's a sadness and an anger to this that comes through. Powerful, very unique.
ReplyDeleteThanks Myrna, you nailed it.
DeleteCry me a raven grabbed and the rest carried me along. I love this!
ReplyDeleteI LOVE this...cry me a raven just grabbed me while the rest carried me happily along. Perfect.
ReplyDeleteI too love the opening verses & that imagery is stunning ~
ReplyDeletecry me a raven was something I'd been sitting on just waiting for the right moment for it to form into a poem.
Deletevivid !
ReplyDeleteExcellent--the sparseness of the lines really connects with the subject. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jeff, appreciate that.
Delete'carrion on your breath...' superb! :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks, although I have to say mine is minty fresh . . . he, he, he.
Deletewhat a start !!..wow...and towards the end i find dark sadness visible...truly extraordinary...
ReplyDeleteDarkly evocative words and image.
ReplyDeleteWhew. This one could be at the PU prompt as well,I think. Would I could pray you up a dove.
ReplyDeleteSuch beauty in this concise write, Kathryn.
ReplyDeletePamela
This is loaded with imagery and emotion. Very beautiful. :)
ReplyDeleteThe memory of 'cry me a river' I think gives us the emotions at the beginning, increasing the effect of the short spark of camera, flash, a blink of eye....you really caught the moment, Kathryn, with camera and the words! :)xx
ReplyDeleteThis tickled my brain in a pleasing way.
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