Tuesday, December 3, 2013

How Do You Feel: #Reverb13

Prompt:  How do you feel, on this first day, in your mind? In your body? In your heart? In your soul?


my mind
 
clutches the steering wheel
driving me round the bend
drifting in the silence
wheel spinning through the noise
 
my body
 
strums pain with its fingers
playing a tune of revenge
I want to call truce
but the olive branch is broken
 
my heart
 
expands and contracts
like billows fanning flames
of gratitude and heartache
laughter and sadness
 
my soul
 
soars and dives
enraptured by the climb
exhilarated by the fall
until splattered across the ground

 
  Linking up with dVerse

32 comments:

  1. your photo is beautiful, and those words....they really resonate with me.

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  2. As with everything you do, gorgeous. Both sides of the coin. Love.

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    1. Thanks Tracy, hope you're feeling better.

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  3. Oh, the cycle we never seem to be able to conquer! Constant work and effort, that is for sure. The photo is stunning - Nature's still life.

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  4. Oh, that last stanza.....the climb, the fall, the splattering of the soul. Takes my breath away!

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  5. This is tells a life's story.. great form.. love how you use the form and the keywords to get progression through your poem.

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  6. That last line creates quite the vivid image. Nice poem.

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  7. Gorgeous imagery in the photo and poem. I'm inspired to write a poem of my own now! :) ~Tui

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    1. Love it when others get inspired . . . go for it. :)

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  8. it is hard when the olive branch is broken to over come...both out own feelings and those of another...and hte flight is nice, the landing can be hard though....smiles...hopefully not too big a splatter....smiles...i like the form you used in this...

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  9. Funny how differently our different parts can behave under the same circumstances.

    (Gorgeous shot, by the way!)

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  10. You poetry continues to inspire - you have such a way with words, painting strong emotions with word pictures.

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  11. I love what you did with this... a perfect way to answer the prompt, and a perfect poem in its own right!

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  12. Your poem resonates with me, beautiful .

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  13. Oh my! The subtle way you've written this helps me to know just what you feel. I've been dealing with an issue that is tossing me about like this. Quite powerful how you engage the reader.

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    1. What a lovely comment, thank you. So happy when someone gets something from what I write.

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  14. Exquisite!
    So happy you've joined us again, Kathryn. It's been a while but it's always a pleasure to see you. xx

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    1. Thanks Kat, I love reverb but wasn't sure I'd be able to participate because my mum is visiting for three weeks. Going to try do the odd post here and there when I can.

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  15. how inertia carries us until we cannot fathom any other course... I liked this poem

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  16. ... love that the " body strums pain with it's fingers"...each stanza is full of sensations and wonderful insight ;)

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  17. really liked the second stanza... being set on revenge def mainly hurts yourself... great write

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  18. This beautiful poem was hard for me to read; it resonates so strongly with where I'm at in so many ways. Thanks for speaking what I have struggled to find words for.

    Tony

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    1. It always moves me when something I've written resonates with another. Sorry it was hard for you to read Tony, hugs.

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  19. Lovely picture and words specially the last stanza ~ Hope you are well ~

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  20. Oh, I did not want it to end in splatter! Each section is beautifully and powerfully conflicted. I especially like the billows--strong and powerful.

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