cry me a raven of ink and feathers... what an opening... love the image and the emotions that are wrapped in it... in italy i visited a paul flora exhibition - he was masterful with drawing ravens with ink and feather...
carrion breath...well only if i dont brush regularly...smiles...cry me a raven is such a cool turn of phrase....def set the tone in your verse...what is cras?
Thanks Brian, cras with one s is latin and means tomorrow, if with 'ss' as in crass it can mean insensitive, thoughtless or tactless.
finally - someone is crying something other than a river... hahah. Cry me a raven of ink and feathers is def a great opener.
He, he, he, I hear you, thanks :)
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Amazing images you capture in those brief words.. exceptional
Wow, thanks Bjorn. :)
This is so perfect for the image--such a sense of mystery about it. And perfect for the incredible image.
Thanks Victoria . . . I was going to try and go with dragons but just couldn't seem to get them to work for me.
I love your double meaning in "carrion." I'm crazy for word play.
Cry me a raven...love that. Fantastic piece!
Thanks Susie . . . that line had been sitting there for a while waiting for a poem to form around it.
Everyone is already commenting on what I really enjoyed most. "Cry me a rave" is creatively original...especially when combined with 'carrion upon your breath.' I like what you did with the prompt.
Thanks Mary . . . I had hoped to create a piece of prose but poetry is where I found myself.
I too like the title and images! Sorry I cannot be more original in my comment. I must say that I am impressed at your unique take.
Thanks Gabriella, I really appreciate it.
Nice. There's a sadness and an anger to this that comes through. Powerful, very unique.
Thanks Myrna, you nailed it.
Cry me a raven grabbed and the rest carried me along. I love this!
I LOVE this...cry me a raven just grabbed me while the rest carried me happily along. Perfect.
I too love the opening verses & that imagery is stunning ~
cry me a raven was something I'd been sitting on just waiting for the right moment for it to form into a poem.
Excellent--the sparseness of the lines really connects with the subject. Very well done!
Thanks Jeff, appreciate that.
'carrion on your breath...' superb! :-)
Thanks, although I have to say mine is minty fresh . . . he, he, he.
what a start !!..wow...and towards the end i find dark sadness visible...truly extraordinary...
Darkly evocative words and image.
Whew. This one could be at the PU prompt as well,I think. Would I could pray you up a dove.
Such beauty in this concise write, Kathryn.Pamela
This is loaded with imagery and emotion. Very beautiful. :)
The memory of 'cry me a river' I think gives us the emotions at the beginning, increasing the effect of the short spark of camera, flash, a blink of eye....you really caught the moment, Kathryn, with camera and the words! :)xx
This tickled my brain in a pleasing way. Leslie Avon Miller