Tuesday, August 5, 2014

Cry Me A Raven

 
cry me a raven
of ink and feathers
scribing innards
black as sorrow

smearing messages
in whispers
of fallen souls

carrion upon your breath
memories
rendered in cras

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36 comments:

  1. cry me a raven of ink and feathers... what an opening... love the image and the emotions that are wrapped in it... in italy i visited a paul flora exhibition - he was masterful with drawing ravens with ink and feather...

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  2. carrion breath...well only if i dont brush regularly...smiles...
    cry me a raven is such a cool turn of phrase....
    def set the tone in your verse...

    what is cras?

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    1. Thanks Brian, cras with one s is latin and means tomorrow, if with 'ss' as in crass it can mean insensitive, thoughtless or tactless.

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  3. finally - someone is crying something other than a river... hahah. Cry me a raven of ink and feathers is def a great opener.

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  4. Amazing images you capture in those brief words.. exceptional

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  5. This is so perfect for the image--such a sense of mystery about it. And perfect for the incredible image.

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    1. Thanks Victoria . . . I was going to try and go with dragons but just couldn't seem to get them to work for me.

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  6. I love your double meaning in "carrion." I'm crazy for word play.

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  7. Cry me a raven...love that. Fantastic piece!

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    1. Thanks Susie . . . that line had been sitting there for a while waiting for a poem to form around it.

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  8. Everyone is already commenting on what I really enjoyed most. "Cry me a rave" is creatively original...especially when combined with 'carrion upon your breath.' I like what you did with the prompt.

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    1. Thanks Mary . . . I had hoped to create a piece of prose but poetry is where I found myself.

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  9. I too like the title and images! Sorry I cannot be more original in my comment. I must say that I am impressed at your unique take.

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  10. Nice. There's a sadness and an anger to this that comes through. Powerful, very unique.

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  11. Cry me a raven grabbed and the rest carried me along. I love this!

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  12. I LOVE this...cry me a raven just grabbed me while the rest carried me happily along. Perfect.

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  13. I too love the opening verses & that imagery is stunning ~

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    1. cry me a raven was something I'd been sitting on just waiting for the right moment for it to form into a poem.

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  14. Excellent--the sparseness of the lines really connects with the subject. Very well done!

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  15. 'carrion on your breath...' superb! :-)

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    1. Thanks, although I have to say mine is minty fresh . . . he, he, he.

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  16. what a start !!..wow...and towards the end i find dark sadness visible...truly extraordinary...

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  17. Darkly evocative words and image.

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  18. Whew. This one could be at the PU prompt as well,I think. Would I could pray you up a dove.

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  19. Such beauty in this concise write, Kathryn.

    Pamela

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  20. This is loaded with imagery and emotion. Very beautiful. :)

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  21. The memory of 'cry me a river' I think gives us the emotions at the beginning, increasing the effect of the short spark of camera, flash, a blink of eye....you really caught the moment, Kathryn, with camera and the words! :)xx

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  22. This tickled my brain in a pleasing way.
    Leslie Avon Miller

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